my name is xian sung, some say I have a tranquil life, listening to mellifluous birds on a riverbank, surrounded by mountains, living in a tall pagoda where I can see the eye awing lake and the desolate mountain tops. That was how I lived . Now my life has changed, a change that can never be turned back
March 3, 2017 at 12:20 pm
The last two sentences of this are your strongest and create a clear tone of tension.
Remember to use capital letters when beginning a sentence or writing a proper noun.
Always re-read and edit your sentence structures – are spellings correct? How will you make your meanings clear?